Constructive criticism: I have trouble keeping that many characters straight, but you don't seem to. (They don't get ignored and they stay 'in character'). I'd ask what his parents think Danny's doing while he's on the mission, but I've read OoG. You could mention that in this story...unless it gets covered in later chapters. I guess I'm vaguely surprised Danny admits he doesn't live in the Ghost Zone. Where do the Hunters think he lives instead? (I don't think the truth would go over very well...)
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Date: 2008-12-05 03:41 pm (UTC)I love the Witch Doctor Incident.
Constructive criticism:
I have trouble keeping that many characters straight, but you don't seem to. (They don't get ignored and they stay 'in character').
I'd ask what his parents think Danny's doing while he's on the mission, but I've read OoG. You could mention that in this story...unless it gets covered in later chapters.
I guess I'm vaguely surprised Danny admits he doesn't live in the Ghost Zone. Where do the Hunters think he lives instead? (I don't think the truth would go over very well...)